We’ve all written a paragraph where we switched from past to present tense three times and suddenly the character is both dead and ordering pancakes.
I know, I know SNORE. Technique! Blergh! While it might seem trivial, basic writing mistakes impact the clarity and cohesion of your narrative. I’m not talking about rigid, stuffy, “perfect” grammatical linguistics being superior to other forms of perfectly decent communication, nor am I promoting that style has nothing to do with compelling writing! Quite the contrary, this blogger-since-2007-who-is-currently-playing-games-with-hyphens feels rules are more than merely meant to be broken, she encourages you to explode the rules altogether. Don’t think outside the box! Blow up the box altogether. Kablamo.
But you can’t explode rules you don’t even acknowledge are there, ready for you to come at ‘em with a jackhammer. And good narratives don’t just happen—they’re built. Carefully, lovingly, with a deep respect for the reader’s time, brain-space, and experience. Having a firm grasp on “the rules” gives you a strong foundation to mindfully make artistic choices within the bounds of English language mores, and also give you more agency over when you break them. That’s technique enhancing natural talent.
Crafting a clear narrative isn’t about sounding smart — it’s about not confusing the hell out of your reader (by making them feel like they’re trapped in a confusing improv scene with a rogue thesaurus and a drunk time traveler)
I know, I know SNORE. Technique! Blergh! While it might seem trivial, basic writing mistakes impact the clarity and cohesion of your narrative. I’m not talking about rigid, stuffy, “perfect” grammatical linguistics being superior to other forms of perfectly decent communication, nor am I promoting that style has nothing to do with compelling writing! Quite the contrary, this blogger-since-2007-who-is-currently-playing-games-with-hyphens feels rules are more than merely meant to be broken, she encourages you to explode the rules altogether. Don’t think outside the box! Blow up the box altogether. Kablamo.
But you can’t explode rules you don’t even acknowledge are there, ready for you to come at ‘em with a jackhammer. And good narratives don’t just happen—they’re built. Carefully, lovingly, with a deep respect for the reader’s time, brain-space, and experience. Having a firm grasp on “the rules” gives you a strong foundation to mindfully make artistic choices within the bounds of English language mores, and also give you more agency over when you break them. That’s technique enhancing natural talent.
Crafting a clear narrative isn’t about sounding smart — it’s about not confusing the hell out of your reader (by making them feel like they’re trapped in a confusing improv scene with a rogue thesaurus and a drunk time traveler)
So buckle in, grab a red pen, and let’s clean up that storytelling like it’s a murder scene on Dateline.
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Try this:
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1. Consistent Tense Usage ( aka: Stay in One Time Zone)
Look. You can write in the past. You can write in the present. But if you’re out here switching between “She walks into the room” and “She had screamed in terror” like you’re building a literary time machine? Your reader is going to throw your book across the room and whisper, “I just wanted peace.” A novel unfolds over chapters and settings, making it crucial to maintain consistent tense usage for a seamless reading experience. If your narrative shifts between past and present tense without a clear purpose, readers will find it disorienting and get literary whiplash. Pick a lane, babe. Consistency keeps your reader anchored in reality. Consistency creates rhythm. And rhythm creates trust. Strive for cohesion by choosing and sticking to a tense that aligns with your narrative vision.Try this:
- Do a “tense pass” after your draft is done — highlight all verbs and check for traitors. Are they all dancing to the same beat?
- When you do shift tenses, do it with intention—like a scene change on a stage— not like you blacked out mid-sentence.
- Practice rewriting a paragraph in both past and present tense. Which feels more alive to your story?
2. Be Faithful with Your Pronouns (aka: Keep References Clear and avoid “Pronoun Chaos”)
“They didn’t know if she meant him or her when she said that to them.”Baby. WHAT?!
Who is “they”? WHO IS “HER”?! Pronoun consistency is vital if you don’t want your reader to feel like they’re deciphering ancient scrolls.
If you start a story talking about Valentina, then suddenly start saying “she” without reminding us who she is, readers start mentally flipping back like, “Wait—who’s ‘SHE’?” Clarity is kindness. Make sure your pronouns are pointing in the right direction and staying loyal to their person. You are the GPS of your story. Please don’t reroute us into a ditch.
Try this:
- Every few paragraphs, double-check: does “he” still mean the same “he”?When in doubt, use the character’s name again. Especially if “she” could mean three different people. Clarity > style.
- If you're writing multiple POVs, color code them in your notes like a messy little genius.
- Read your piece aloud and circle every “he,” “she,” “they,” or “it.” Could a stranger follow who’s being referred to?
- In scenes with multiple characters, reintroduce names now and then to keep us grounded.
3. Balancing Active and Passive Voice (aka: Let the Verbs Lead and STOP SAYING “WAS”)
If you keep writing “She was being chased,” and “The door was opened by him,” I’m going to gently tip over a chair.Active voice gives your sentences backbone. It says: “I did this.”
Passive voice says: “This was done… by someone… maybe?”
While passive voice has its place for specific effects, an overabundance dilutes the impact of your narrative, and if you lean too hard on the passive, your prose gets foggy.
Let your characters do things!
Let the actions leap off the page!
What is Passive Voice?
Passive voice is a grammatical construction that places the object of the sentence before the verb. A sentence written in passive voice shifts the focus from the subject doing the action to the recipient of the action. Sentences in passive voice can be less clear, direct, and concise.
Let your characters do things!
Let the actions leap off the page!
What is Passive Voice?
Passive voice is a grammatical construction that places the object of the sentence before the verb. A sentence written in passive voice shifts the focus from the subject doing the action to the recipient of the action. Sentences in passive voice can be less clear, direct, and concise.
The biggest problem with passive voice is that it removes agency and responsibility from the individual carrying out the action. This distinction is particularly important when discussing power dynamics.
How to Spot Passive Voice
Not every use of a “to be” verb is passive voice. A passive voice sentence generally goes like this:
How to Change Passive Voice
Identify the subject of the sentence and put it first:
Passive voice isn’t evil — but if your whole novel sounds like it’s being narrated by a terrified butler, we’ve got a problem. Active voice brings the juice. The guts. The oomph.
Try this:
How to Spot Passive Voice
Not every use of a “to be” verb is passive voice. A passive voice sentence generally goes like this:
[object of the action] + [to be verb] + [past tense main verb].TIP: If you can add “by zombies” to the end of your sentence and it still makes sense, it is likely in passive voice. For instance, “The pizza was eaten” still works when you add “The pizza was eaten by zombies.” So, this sentence is written in passive voice. You’re welcome.
How to Change Passive Voice
Identify the subject of the sentence and put it first:
[subject] + [main verb] + [object].That changes the previous sentence to: “Zombies ate the pizza.”
Passive voice isn’t evil — but if your whole novel sounds like it’s being narrated by a terrified butler, we’ve got a problem. Active voice brings the juice. The guts. The oomph.
Try this:
- Take a page of your writing and rewrite every passive sentence into the active voice. See what happens.Keep passive voice for when the receiver of the action matters more than the doer (e.g., “The cake was eaten”—because the cake is the tragedy here). Use passive voice when you want to obscure responsibility (useful for mystery!). Sparingly.
- When editing, ask: “Who’s doing the action here?” If it’s unclear, bring them to the front of the sentence.
- Highlight every “was” in your draft and ask yourself if you’re being lazy or brilliant.
4. Punctuation Precision (aka: This Comma Could Save a Life)
Grammar is like deodorant: you don’t have to use it, but things get real uncomfortable real fast when you don’t. Think of punctuation like the conductor of your sentence symphony. A well-placed comma can create breath. A period can drop the mic. Overusing em-dashes or ellipses? That’s like waving your hands in the air. Readers get tired. Know the rules so you can bend them with style—not confusion.“Let’s eat Grandma” vs. “Let’s eat, Grandma.”
Respect the comma.
Respect Grandma.
Try this:
- Read your writing aloud, and pause at every punctuation mark. Does the rhythm feel natural, or like a hiccup?
- Beware of overusing “!” or “…”—they can dilute your power. Trust the words themselves.
- Learn the difference between an em-dash (—) and a hyphen (-). They're not the same.
- Use commas to separate ideas, not glue them all together into one endless sentence. If your sentences read like breathless text messages from a manic ghost, your reader will quit on you.
- Use periods. Stop writing 97-word sentences, I beg.
5. Know how to Properly Plan. (aka: Don’t Wing It)
Writers love to romanticize chaos—but a clear story needs some kind of map, even if it's scribbled on a napkin. So plan your story (yes, even you, chaotic Pantser!) “But I don’t want to outline! I like discovering the story as I go!”
Wahhh. That’s cute. But guess what? You don’t need to outline every beat on a spreadsheet, but you do need to know the emotional arc. Where are we going? Who’s changing? What’s at stake?
Your story needs bones before you start putting skin on it.
Try this:
- Write a one-paragraph summary of your book. If you can’t? You don’t know what it’s about yet.
- Before you begin, jot down three sentences: where it starts, what shifts, “Oh Sh*t, Everything's Falling Apart” part, how people change, and how it ends.
- Use index cards or sticky notes to lay out scenes. Move them around like a deranged detective. At some point, something will click.
And the big, big. big one:
6. "Show, Don't Tell" (aka: Let the Reader Feel It)
When you tell readers something, you make a statement they have not choice but to accept as true. When you show them something, you describe and dramatize it, allowing readers to see what's happening and draw their own conclusions. Readers love to “people watch” as much as ordinary humans do—we all draw conclusions based on the snippets of information we collect as we go, and make meaning of those snippets. This is why people watching is fascinating! Telling, (when used sparingly!) IS an excellent way of conveying a lot of information or exposition quickly, but it doesn't allow readers use their imaginations; it doesn't engage or arouse them.
So. Don’t tell me the character is angry—show me how her hands tremble as she tries to unlock the door. Readers want to feel the story, not be briefed on it. Use action, dialogue, body language, and setting to convey emotion and conflict. You’re not just telling a story—you’re building an experience.
Consider these examples of showing and telling:
Telling:
Third-person version: “She was sad.”
First-person version: “I’m sad.”
First-person version: “I’m sad.”
This description doesn't actually provide a clear picture of Sadsack Susan.
Also, this passage doesn't reveal anything about Susan. You don't know what age she is or what kind of life she leads, and you don't really care.
In what WAY is she sad?
What KIND of sadness is she experiencing?
In what WAY is she demonstrating her sadness?
What kind of activities is she doing to mitigate her sadness?
What KIND of sadness is she experiencing?
In what WAY is she demonstrating her sadness?
What kind of activities is she doing to mitigate her sadness?
Also, this passage doesn't reveal anything about Susan. You don't know what age she is or what kind of life she leads, and you don't really care.
Showing:
Here, you can see Sadsack Susan in action, observe her directly and make your own judgements, instead of having the author telling you what to think.
Third person version: “Susan picked at her dinner, 10 pounds lighter than last week, her sunken eyes fixed on the blinking cursor of her unanswered email.”
First person version: “I am eating cold fries in the bathtub while Googling ‘how to be a person’ but otherwise fine.”
First person version: “I am eating cold fries in the bathtub while Googling ‘how to be a person’ but otherwise fine.”
Here, you can see Sadsack Susan in action, observe her directly and make your own judgements, instead of having the author telling you what to think.
The telling version gives us information; the other gives us an experience. Your job isn’t just to relay events—it’s to invite the reader inside the emotional weather of the world. In reality, you do need to tell your readers some details to move the narrative from one dramatic passage to another. But mostly you need to build up a vivid picture, which the reader can visualize like a film passing before their eyes.
So once more for the people in the back:
Don’t tell me she’s sad. Show me the woman standing in line at CVS crying into a melted bag of peanut M&Ms! Readers want scenes, not summaries. Telling skips the good stuff. Showing pulls us in like the nosy little drama goblins we are.
Try this:
- Take a telling sentence and rewrite it with sensory detail. What does it look like? Smell like? Feel like?
- Cut out 5 “feeling words” in your draft and replace them with physical actions or dialogue.
- Pay attention to body language—it’s often more honest than dialogue. (So swap “She was furious” and transform it to “She crushed the paper cup in her hand and whispered, ‘Coolcoolcoolcoolcool.’”)
- Read your favorite novel’s dialogue or description. Where does it show instead of explain?
- Ask yourself: “Could this be a GIF instead of a sentence?” If yes, show it.